It would seem that the newest candidate for dictator has taken to the stage. I personally want to thank those who did the analysis of my first statement. It would seem that in my enthusiasm to meet you all, I made a few grammatical mistakes in my paper. Through the kind efforts of those who represent the philosopher king, they were kind enough fix those mistakes for me. But citizens you must ask yourself, who do you want to represent yourself. There is me, a man willing to put himself out there for you, a man who knows no fear, and a man who is willing to admit when he makes a mistake. Then, there is this "philosopher king" who refuses to show himself, who instead lets other speak for him. Do we really need a ruler who is so blatantly being controlled by some puppet-master from behind the stage? I can offer you the personal touch of ruler ship that is so desperately needed in this country. Do we really need another ruler who will be spoken for by lobbyist who only have their own interest in mind? I don't want that, Barrack Obama doesn't want that, and I know that the world doesn't need that. The cycle must end, and we must take the risk to strive for more, to go where others have yet gone. I was chosen to lead, and if that is what fate has destined me to do, then who am I to deny it? I am a man, a husband, a teacher, a student, a human, and I will fight against the unknown shadows who call themselves the "Philosopher King"
Jared Good
Guardian of Students,
Protector of Grades,
Defender of Justice,
and Vanquisher of Final
not a bad response
ReplyDeleteif you don't mind a little critique, I have some to offer:
-it was interesting that you mentioned what Barack Obama wants, and I suppose with him being the president it's a fair assumption but it's still possible that many who read this are very much at odds with him and for them that statement wouldn't really support your argument
-it was also interesting that, despite the attack on your spelling/grammer, you acknowledged it and appeared to make no attempt to fix it - presumably on purpose; if so, it might have helped to add an explanation for why the clarity of your speech shouldn't matter yano? I'm not saying you did a bad job, just that I would have added a bit extra